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  • HW Writing: Promote Yourself – Feedback

  • Solomon Hernandez

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    22.03.2022 at 22:41

    Hi Vlad! Good job writing your profile. You wrote some quite interesting details here. Your sentences also used correct verb tenses most of the time. Here are some things to take note of. First, the part that said, “My strenghts are: keeping calm, critical thinking, stoicism” may just be removed and you can just edit the first part of your entry. The part about choking people or breaking their legs might be too disturbing for some people. Are you sure you want to include that in a public profile? Haha

    There were also some grammatical and spelling errors. For example, you wrote, “I always calm”. But this should be “I’m always calm”. I’ve made comments on the document so please check them out.


    A nice and interesting entry overall though. Hope to see more of your outputs in the future!

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